Adelaide!!!!!!! from where!!!!!! it's been aeons... how did you even know that I updated my blog!!!! well, thanks so much for the comments, I find them very encouraging... and do suggest an alternative line for "feel it, touch it" in case you can come up with something...
it captures a real moment, but you need to find new, fresh ways of saying things like 'dense with weight of the unspoken' and 'haunting memories linger'.
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"Dense with weight of the unspoken" is terrific.
But I don't know about the commanding tone I feel in 'feel it, touch it' in the next line.
The last stanza is good and so is the first. Really shows you the look of love. (If there's a poetic way of saying it).
Adelaide!!!!!!! from where!!!!!! it's been aeons... how did you even know that I updated my blog!!!!
well, thanks so much for the comments, I find them very encouraging... and do suggest an alternative line for "feel it, touch it" in case you can come up with something...
it captures a real moment, but you need to find new, fresh ways of saying things like 'dense with weight of the unspoken' and 'haunting memories linger'.
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