tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8140975366698341226.post5583274963081525266..comments2023-04-26T06:27:34.232+05:30Comments on heartstrings: What IfsShruti Sareenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08024310909238920742noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8140975366698341226.post-59655252625885145172011-11-20T23:11:04.413+05:302011-11-20T23:11:04.413+05:30dearest shruti,
i liked whatifs a lot, and the on...dearest shruti,<br /><br />i liked whatifs a lot, and the one about ootin is very imaginative. i feel your poems show a lot of potential. <br /><br />i agree with vivek that stricter editing would help. poetry needs to be economical, not wordy. let it all pour out in the initial drafts, but a few days later, be picky and delete repetitive stuff.<br /><br />having said that, i must add that i enjoyed every bit i read. <br /><br />'making love' is too sentimental. having read a lot of your anguished poems, i find that particular theme of loss and unrequited yearning appears over and over till i almost dread another one of those. <br />move on, baby.<br /><br />keep writing. you're good. <br />love always,<br />m'yAnjali Krishnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05167813684323077202noreply@blogger.com